ajruby12

I agree with Sir Malachi. If you break it down into much shorter bits, you'll get serious reviews.

Ha, I was actually just thinking over the absence of the stake. One note I'd like to make is that some of these sections were revised at rather early hours ...

Hm.. I'm working on those bits and pieces little by little. But hopefully, it'll make sense later on as the story continues. But I understand your point!

Hm.. I'll keep all that in mind as I'm revising. Thank you! -Lady Ariana, The Silver Knight

Thanks! I'll try to remember that next time!

It's fine..

Hey! ajruby12 here for a quick review! Ok, I'm usually one who doesn't like repetition in stories or poetry. I liked the idea but it was just.. Boring, in my ...

Aw.. :/ And just when I had time to read it..

I love it! Sounds like what I used to write when I was younger! :) (Most of my stories I would burn though...)

Phoebe's always complaining because I can't write the whole book at once.. But then she demands I send more!

Oh Goodness.. MUST you leave people hanging like this? I do it in my chapters often but not at this turning point.

Ha, I'm the type of person that uses too much punctuation.

But still.. It makes those sections a bit abrupt and look like typos.

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Very, very true.. I like to think of myself as a beginning writer/poet.. I may have the ability, but I have a long ways to go in becoming an actual ...