adeleay

I think this would be a good extended poem. [quote]a greenhouse glass to fit over all of them with only the tree for air and the sink for water.[/quote] I ...

I thought the poem was quite good. [quote] Through the warm august woods, trees blocking the light. Down the cobbled path, Evening sun feeling my face. [/quote] I don't understand ...

I read the start of this, Im too lazy to read it all as i feel quite tired at the moment. I will read this all when i get round ...

I think it is quite good however what does 'first drink' really represent. Is it the first exposure to alcohol or is it the first drink that causes your emotions ...

I thought the the poem was excellent, i was able to sympathize with the character in the poem :) i liked the line 'Tell me why my bones still hide ...

I thought your story was quite good. I think to improve it you could use a little less dialogue and a little more description :) Another mistake is when you ...

Hi I'm new to YWS. Do you have any tips about work i may submit? Pm me or reply on here :) Thanks Adele x :)

I think the description was excellent. I felt i could truly sympathize with the character. This was truly outstanding and i liked the juxtaposition of the burning and crying (like ...