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Another good chapter; I spotted some issues with grammar and spelling, but I'll cut you some slack since you already said that you've been having issues with that since you ...

Once again, kitty15 already found all of the typos. :lol: Glad to see that you continued the story, now we're starting to get a bit more characterization and story problem. ...

Wow, that was better than I expected. Truth be told, I thought I was going to have to lecture you on proper spelling once I saw the description under the ...

Yeah, kitty15 already hit the typo problem. Just put your text into whatever word processor you have on your computer and preform a spellcheck and you should be fine. Other ...

Cool. Yay. :D I was hoping that it wasn't going to be one of those, you're too good of a writer for that, Dynamo. :wink:

To be blatantly honest, I adore character development. I will love any story, no matter how cliched the storyline, if it has believable, deep characters. I agree with Duskglimmer; the ...

The following is a reiteration of what everyone else has already said. :lol: I never get here fast enough to have first say. Anyway... Your dialog punctuation is way off. ...

Funny, but I'm not really sure what's going on. I particularly liked the last part: "Look, this isn't Kingdom Hearts, so can you and your key stick please get outta ...

Wow. You did a lot with such a short space. You did exactly what a prologue is meant to do; set up the scene and wet the reader's appetite for ...

First off, thanks for signing my guestbook! :D Okay... Everyone above me has already said that it's too short, so I won't repeat that... I agree with JCobsessed, your sentences ...

Well, I read all three books in the series and I still don't know if I like it as much as I thought I would. Uglies was undoubtedly the best ...

Okay, lemme see here... First off, welcome to YWS! :D Typically, the rule is to critique two pieces of work before you post your own work (so that other writers ...

Okay, this story was interesting, but I think you lost a bit of the part that made it fantasy about halfway through. I mean, first you're talking about unicorns, and ...

Must better than the first (didn't review because what I found wrong with the first draft had already been said). It still feels a little short though, and I think ...

I also read it for my freshman year. Some people liked it and some didn't, mainly because of some violent scenes, but overall, I think that it was an excellent ...