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Howdy again! It wasn't love. She knew what love felt like. All she had to do was look up at Aspen to remind herself of that. No, she wasn't in ...

Heyo, If only she could understand why he hated her so much. Aspen glanced over her shoulder at her. Cass gave a small smile in return, knowing that she could ...

The pacing was better here, there was a nice flow between dialog, action, and introspection. I also enjoyed that the first people they met weren't trying to kill them, however ...

Hello Saen, Gonna leave a brief review - a lot of great pointers were already provided by your previous reviewers. I agree with Blue that this could be condensed a ...

Sheyyyyy “It’s not orichalcum or mithril. I can electrify it.” Fairly sure mithril belongs to Tolkien/The Lord of The Rings. “Don’t use all your magic up now,” Januse said calmly. ...

Hi Pan, The heat of the water shocked her awake, but not by much. You’ve chosen a powerful verb and then diminished it immediately afterwards. Mrs Humphreys was going to ...

Well, that was interesting. I immediately got the impression that this story was intended to be light-hearted and not take itself too seriously, and you stuck with that quite well. ...

“Let me be clear. I’m just as unhappy about this arrangement as you are,” Navarre said from the sofa to Reyvo, in response to the glares being flung his direction. ...

“You’ll be seeing a lot of me over the next two years. I visit this facility rather frequently, to check on the magicians of tomorrow . Speaking of this facility, ...

Hey, sorry I'm kinda late. That she might sleep on a mattress without lumps, wear silk every day, brush her teeth without a million skinny bodies jostling for space at ...

Sheyyyy, Walking into the clearing, Navarre could feel all eyes on him as his cape billowed behind him . Every apprentice knew that he had come in first, and if ...

Hey Shey ^_^ Exliana stared at the moon through the window of their cottage. Its light glossed over the room,the bunk bed, the two chairs and small table, and the ...

Hey DP, I also didn't feel in the mood to nit-pick, and there wasn't much to comment on in that regard, anyway. Louise seems to be a fan favourite. I ...

Hi DP, It was her lookout. I didn’t know what this meant either until I searched on google, which said the word is informal British (so am I lol). I’m ...

Hey Pan! I saved this review for today because I wanted to settle down and re-read everything you’ve posted thus far. You’ve written enough for me to gauge how the ...