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I’m a lazy scrub so I’m going to quote the whole story and put my live thoughts in bold for you. If you hate that then let me know. Methodius ...

Yay, a good 2nd draft to follow. How rare. Congrats on finishing. I'm new to this story but I've seen it posted a lot. Centius the Wise had the flu. ...

Hey ^_^ I read this story because I saw you posted something about it on your wall. At first I didn’t really get the prologue because it was so direct ...

Hey, Zoom here. I’ve made live comments as I’m reading – check the spoiler below. Overall comments: I’m going to start with the negatives so we can end on positives. ...

Hello fellow Flash fan ^_^ The biggest advice I’m going to dish out here is to format your writing, because reading a block of text isn’t fun. You can write ...

Hey ^_^ The armor may look heavy but it was made light for battle. Viper spread his wings and flapped them a little to get the wing blades to fit ...

Kman ^_^ Anya was saddened as she fell back and sat on the steps. She gripped her chest, feeling her heart twinge in pain as if someone was crushing it. ...

Hey Shikora, Wow I can see your writing improving so much chapter after chapter, it's really nice to see. Although I think you are definitely making less errors and your ...

Hello Louisiana, “Ostend energias kraptus,” reveal the hidden power. In the dark of night, four men stride through the village which is expertly hidden by powerful wards and spells. By ...

Hi ViaLia ^_^ I was hanging onto my life by a literal thread. I hung onto one of the ropes from the plane. As the only survivor of a tragic ...

Hey ^_^ Loud footsteps could be heard from behind him. He spun around his fangs bared and his tail ready to lash out at whoever was coming toward him. Heavy ...

Hi Shikora You’ve already received 5 helpful reviews/comments, however I feel like I could weigh in with some more points. Moreover, you seem to post at a consistent pace so ...

Hey Tale, As we got closer to Grandfather's little town, I began to feel apprehensive for no reason other than the fact that I knew my grandfather was getting older. ...

Hey Kman Welcome to the Badlands. A place where chaos is prevalent, and order is nearly nonexistent. Once it was home to a mighty empire brimming with magic that kept ...

Hello again, I made sure every visitor to our home saw my rings. I told them about each one, and of course, told them where they came from and all ...