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“It was a World War Two thing, wasn’t it?” Hildegarde said. “Germany got Austria and they united and became one thing. Sort of like your eyebrows have.” Oh the burn ...

Hey, Review time! Darkness... Despair... Desolation. Trees loomed high above me; their snow covered branches creaking in the otherwise quiet night. The crunch of untouched snow beneath my boots and ...

Hey This was fantastic. Your writing is very smooth and polished. If I had to nitpick, the only part that stuck out to me was the repetition here: crisscrossed by ...

Hey This is fantastic. Always happy to see a story posted here that is based in England, especially when it is this good. You have such a gift for using ...

Hey, I read this piece to the end so felt I should drop a comment. I noticed that you switched from past to present tense a few times, easily fixed. ...

Interesting! I feel like a lot of the issues I mentioned previously are now improved. There’s still slightly too much detail for mundane actions, and I’m still in desperate need ...

Hey, “Skylar, would you pass me that wrench, please?” Timothy Rennedon, Skylar's father and the owner of Rennedon Repairs, requested, sticking his head out from underneath the cockpit. Way too ...

Hey, I noticed this story was about to slip onto page 2 without getting a review. We can't have that. On a nondescript day in a desert unheard of in ...

Hey, Some good stuff here - here's a mostly positive review for you. The kills had been necessary, but it was sad to see how many they had had to ...

and hurriedly getting out of bed and hurrying out of bed thrown up in a neat ponytail “Thrown up” doesn’t really conjure an image that coincides with “neat” Be careful ...

Hey, "Growing up is hard to do ", many older people explained to me while I was still an adolescent. Maybe that was in response to the volcanic acne that ...

Hey, I really enjoyed this . . . Hildegarde twiddled her hairpin and pushed it further in the lock. “Just a teensy look.” You built so much characterisation with just ...

Hey Fair warning: I don’t beat around the bush. I’m here to give you the honest, unfiltered perspective of a reader. Benjamin Marcos is dead. I think you should take ...

I'm not sure what to make of this. The introduction started with an almost-flashback, which meant the transition from past to present tense in the same paragraph was awkward. And ...

Hey, Zoom here for a review. Let's get straight to it! Meet, Matt and Matt-2, don't forget Osazoid. These are 3 best friends, Matt is 100% human, Matt-2 is a ...