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  • Poetry » Romantic, Dramatic Re: Crushes Can Crush You

    Hey Writer. Yes, I am reviewing a poem, okay? Nitpicks Don't hope for something too far out of reach, because you won't reach it. Add far. And that's what makes ...

    Sep 29, 2014
  • Novel / Chapter » Realistic, Narrative Re: Blind - Chapter 19

    Hey Willow! I was looking for things to review, and I realized I never reviewed chapter 19, so here I am. ^^ Nitpicks/Suggestions Her words were smooth as silk and ...

    Sep 28, 2014
  • Novel / Chapter » Fantasy, Action / Adventure Re: The Siege, Chapter two: Failure (part 3/3)

    Hey Alchemist! ^^ Before going on to the nitpicks, I just gotta say that I loved your 4th paragraph, where you described the city! You only spent a few simple ...

    Sep 28, 2014
  • Novel / Chapter » Fantasy, Action / Adventure Re: Syrin: Essential Fire - Chapter 1

    *beats procrastination* Hey Wolf! ^^ Now I'm just gonna speak about my favorite parts, so prepare for the 'curious-me'. :3 First off... WHAT'S AN EPOLIS? Like seriously, I was really ...

    Sep 26, 2014
  • Novel / Chapter » Narrative, Realistic Re: Blind - Chapter 18

    Hey there! The ending! :o Woah, I really want to go and read the next chapter already. Your plot is so awesome, and you keep it fresh and exciting all ...

    Aug 31, 2014
  • Novel / Chapter » Action / Adventure, Fantasy Re: Secret of the One

    Hey Therese! First time I'm ever reviewing one of your works, so this'll be fun! *laughs evily* Not a single bleat of a goat could be heard. Not even a ...

    Aug 16, 2014
  • Novel / Chapter » Science Fiction, Fantasy Re: Ascension Prologue-Don't Fear the Reaper and Chapter 1- Lapis

    Hello again! Nitpicks But still they pressed on. v Nevertheless, they pressed on. But is okay to start a sentence with, but I'd still suggest you to replace it. It ...

    Aug 13, 2014
  • Novel / Chapter » Science Fiction, Fantasy Re: Ascension Prologue-Don't Fear the Reaper and Chapter 1- Lapis

    Hey there, beans! I can see that you're new to YWS, so first off: Welcome to YWS! ^^ One thing here is that when you post long stories, people seem ...

    Aug 12, 2014
  • Short Story » General, General Re: Lake-woods

    Hey there! ^^ As four people have already been here before me, I have little to say, but I'll still give it a shot. We gave you the famous Peach ...

    Aug 10, 2014
  • Other » Humor, Other Re: LoL

    Hello, Zontafer here for a review! I didn't exactly get this, but then I read some of your comments below and I got it. xD You clicked the Publishing Center, ...

    Aug 8, 2014
  • Poetry » Spiritual, Spiritual Re: The Light

    Zontafer here! I'm not Christian but I decided to review this anyways, since it looks good! I like how you started out with only rhyming the 2nd, 4th, 5th and ...

    Jul 27, 2014
  • Script » Dramatic, Film Re: .

    Hey there, Zontafer here to review your work! First off, I'd just like to tell you that I don't know anything about scripts, so I thought I could rather focus ...

    Jul 27, 2014
  • Short Story » Fantasy, Supernatural Re: EhlĂ©win

    Hello! Zontafer to review your work! I really liked this short! It reminded me of Norse Mythology/Middle Earth (Tolkien). One thing I don't get is why this is written in ...

    Jul 27, 2014
  • Article / Essay » Humor, Realistic Re: Problems and Dogs

    Zontafer here to review your work! First off, I started grinning to myself a bit. I remember when I was younger and how afraid I was of dogs, because a ...

    Jul 27, 2014
  • Other » General, General Re: Untitled~Prologue

    Hey there, Zontafer here to review your work! I can see you named the title 'Untitled~Prologue'. Does that mean you will be writing more of this story, like chapters? Is ...

    Jul 27, 2014


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