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Eager to hear your thoughts, thank you.

I plan to remake this into two chapters (I want to make the monsters more sympathetic, more 'human', this daunting text would become a nightmare to reviewers if I didn't ...

I plan to remake this into two chapters (I want to make the monsters more sympathetic, more 'human', this daunting text would become a nightmare to reviewers if I didn't ...

The only thing I don't like about it is the lack of optional personal pronouns I tried my best to avoid anything that would define a gender for the character, ...

Thank you for your detailed review. I shall try to keep your advice in mind for the next short story I post. If I write one that is interesting enough ...

@Hattable One time could count as a mistake, twice means they are doing this on purpose. Reporting.

Even if you are new to the site that does not explain why you would do that. It's not like this site uses any unique systems. But meh, mistakes happen.

I left the repetitive language there intentionally because I figured it fit the narrative, but if you all feel like it distracts rather then Immerses. Thank you for your thoughts.

hm, why is this a copy/paste of the review bellow?

p.s thank you for your thoughts.

Why would a story about repition avoid repetitive language? As for the end I figured I said enough to establish a few things. Sorry if I didn't go into enough ...

Harsh as hell phrasing, but thanks for your thoughts. This story is fantasy based, not some sort of game. The whole [] is because someone suggested it when I was ...

Thoughts accounted for, thank you for sharing.

Took your grammar suggestions into consideration. As for the on, and with thing, that would change the meaning of sentence. The guy is making a sex joke, while also saying ...

Thank you for your thoughts.