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Re: Aesta: Chapter 3 - Caravan to Mao Part 1
Thank you so much for your constructive criticism. I'll work on fixing those things and making sure to point out who I'm talking about. :D
Mar 7, 2010 -
Re: The box
This is really nice! Bit in my opinion, you could combine some verses together and it would make it an easier read. But poetry is whatever the reader wants it ...
Mar 5, 2010 -
Re: Aesta: Chapter 1- The Soldier
To Kamorama, The little bit about Vaughn being girly, it was supposed to be a funny little thing. But I guess it didn't go over well. I'll change that part, ...
Mar 2, 2010 -
Re: Just Standing
Maybe you can add a few more lines about your nervousness? You know, to describe it a little more. Other than that its really good!
Mar 1, 2010 -
Re: The Aliens Are Coming (a haiku)
What kind of aliens are they? XD What do you think they look like? (I loved the Haikuu~!)
Mar 1, 2010 -
Re: Aesta: Chapter 1- The Soldier
Anyone want to say anything? I would really like some constructive criticism...
Mar 1, 2010 -
Re: I'll Fly with You
It reminds me of the song "Fly me to the Moon" The one Frank Sinatra sings. So far what you have is really good! I also wonder how its supposed ...
Mar 1, 2010 -
Re: I'm not your slave
I really like this. What sort of genre were you thinking to play this song? Do you have what it sounds like in your head?
Mar 1, 2010