ZaryaParadis

Hey Neva. The title caught my attention really well, and might I just say. Very well done. As horrific as this is, it is well written. With the first point ...

Wow, this is utterly amazing. I think you're going to be a great father, is it okay if I steal this for my boyfriend to read to our baby? I ...

Wow.... This is really deep. I've seen works like this in the past, but this is truly art. I've watched movies, read short stories, but I don't believe I have ...

Well, I have to say this poem took an interesting turn for me. At the beginning, I thought it was going to be a deep, meaningful poem. The ending surprised ...

Might I just say... creepy. You say she's sixteen? That seems... morbid. Very morbid. I understand there are the "Voices", but honestly. Perhaps her age could be a little older? ...

I'm not sure if I understand the meaning of this or not. The flow of this is a bit choppy, I think. None of the words quite go together. It ...