ZanyPlebeian

I liked this piece. I definitely felt for its message, and I think it was concise and clearly stated. Sometimes it was too obviously stated, such as in the lines: ...

This wasn't too terribly remarkable to me. It seemed too typical, too "I'm a teenager in high school"-feeling to me. "I pick up that orange ball in my hands" "That" ...

Mmm..I liked this. I really like the form. It started off really strong, but sort of got bogged down in its prosaic nature later on. I used to write poetry ...

I felt this piece was too love-letter-like and hard for me to accept. I understood clearly what you were saying, but I didn't really understand why the poem needed to ...

Ooo! This one really interested me. It had a very classic feel to it (which I love, if it is done well.) I can only praise it for how is ...

I didn't really enjoy this one. To me, it just seemed like another love poem that just tried too hard. I don't know how to explain it better than that...I ...

I don't mean this as malicious, but I found the poem to be very cliche and trite. First of all, the concept of a "trapped mind" is not a new ...

I really enjoyed this piece. I don't know if you've heard the song "Woman is the Nigger of the World," but I saw the connection clearly in the first stanza...overall, ...

This was gorgeous. Everything about it was enjoyable...if I could change anything, though, I would change the last line. Because, when you are 24, you could still feel the same ...

This was intriguing...I didn't like the first stanza very much at all, but you convinced me in the second and third ones. Oh, one thing though...I hate the use of ...

This was too typical I felt. There was nothing glaringly cliche, but the whole piece moved together in such a way that I feel I could have read this in ...

Psy--when you put your poetry up for critique, and someone critiques it, it is not the time to become defensive and try to explain yourself; rather, it's time to either ...

This was written technically well, but not terribly originally. I did see a fine number of cliches in it, though they didn't make me hate the poem. I would have ...

I wasn't going to do a full critique, but... [comments], {remove}, (add) freedom 3-23-06 Freedom [a very hard topic to write about, because it's been done so many times before. ...

This one didn't emotionally connect to me as well as some of your pervious work. Technically, it's very well-done, but there's something missing just below the surface. I know that's ...