ZannaShepherd

Hi, Your story was (I thought) awesome. I was able to follow the plot easily and enjoyed the way it was written. You could use a bit more description, (I ...

Hi, I really liked the plot of your story (I think it has real potential!) The story moved a little fast, and I think it needs more description. Like what ...

Your story was kind of hard to read, and even harder to follow (sorry). I think you should slow down a little and take your time. The basic plot seemed ...

Hi, I enjoyed reading this first part of your story immensely. I really like Avatar also. Your story kept true to the show while at the same time you're adding ...

Hi, I enjoyed ready your story immensely. I really liked your idea of Sky pirates, (it's neat!) like Jetpack mentioned, you to slow down and smooth the plot out some. ...

Hi, The story was ok, it just really needed a plot it didn't really go anywhere. The reader doesn't know like where they are, why they're there, or why someone ...

Hi, I really enjoyed reading all of the chapters in of your story so far. They're really good, and kept me engrossed till the end( I can't wait for more) ...

Hi, The story was alright, it felt like a tiny segment from a much larger story, It didn't really start or end any where, also it need more description about ...

Hi, Great story! I liked how you made it as if the girl was watching a scene from her past, neat idea. There were a couple sentences that didn't quite ...

Hi Dakota, I really liked this story. I love dogs so that might have been part of it. I like the way the story was written and the antics of ...

Hi, I really enjoyed this piece of work. I like how you kept it interesting, and made it funny. I also like how it's a modern Cinderella Story turned upside ...

Yay! Another competitor! Personally I really liked your story. I enjoyed the description, but then again I always put to much in my stories anyhow. I like where the story ...

Hi, Great prologue! I really enjoyed it, just keep writing so we don't all die of anticipation. Please keep me posted on when you write more. Eagerly waiting ~Zanna P.S. ...

This is a really nice piece of writing. I enjoyed it immensely, especially your great description! :D The way you wrote it made it seem like it was a true ...

This part also needs a lot of editing: Do you think that it will be possible to speak to her?” you could put 'would' instead of will. sure ill transfer.'I'll' ...