ZannaShepherd

OK, first off, I have have to say you did a great job with the description, everything was so vivid and colorful and I wish I had half of your ...

Wow, that was a great start, very powerful especially the ending where it mentions the first to die, here's one other error I found, other then the ones already pointed ...

Ok, I think you did a good job here, but I really have no idea where this is happening or what the main character is supposed to look like or ...

Hi. OK this could be a start to something great, but it needs some work. I'm not exactly sure what's happening here with the water. How are they dancing on ...

This beginning has great potential! I like how you had the character see herself, and the vagueness of it, makes me definitely want to read more. sarebear already did the ...

Hi, I really like the beginning of your story. It's compelling and makes me want to keep reading. Here are some things I found that you could fix. I notice ...

Yay! I'm glad you wrote more! (Thanks for letting me know!) Here's some things I found. . . . I still had those ropes and the stake. Wasn't there only ...

Hi amatuli, :smt039 I got your message. :D This is a really short piece so there's not much I can critique you on. Here are a few things I found: ...

Yay! I'm glad you wrote more. I really like where your going with this story. Here are a few things I found: But before I could feel safe with them ...

Hi Fantasy♥101, Sorry, I'm new at this, and totally suck at giving reviews. I really liked your story! It had a great plot and kept me glued to the page. ...

Hi, The plot of your story was ok, but it reminded me a lot of Eragon. The characters were a little plain and I felt nothing towards them. The ending ...

Hi Miss Ching, Your story was ok, but it was lacking any real plot. Your characters were kind of shallow, I felt nothing towards them. Other than that here are ...

Hi Elia92, Your story definitely has the feel of a fairy tale to it. Your plot was solid enough, but I think you should slow it down a bit. (It ...

Hi Elia92, :smt039 I really liked this piece of writing. (It's just a start to a story, correct?) The plot was compelling, and makes the reader (me) want to read ...

Hi Dakota, :smt039 I really liked your story! It was a little hard too follow sometimes, and it ended abruptly, but it was still awesome. :smt026 Also it felt like ...