Youngwriter724

that would be awesome.

Alright i'm back. but now i have read all three parts of this story. and i apologize, because other than a missing word here or there or awkward phrasing i ...

"recent behavior had not recently" the wording is a bit weird. i would just get rid of recently. "his assistant the short stout Felipe Belgrano who was in his mid ...

Needs a bit of polishing, but that is a great ending, befitting a great story. (:

i see i wasn't aware it was flash fiction, lol. Well either way it was quite well done.

Yes definitely. I am really curious to where your going to take the story, and I love your writing so definitely tag me.

Alright so to start off I just want to say that I loved what I read. Your characters are really well written and developed. the setting was also just as ...

I understand completely my novel is in the same stages lol

I love your descriptions, all in all i liked your story a lot.

Wow. thats all i got to say. i love it.

wow. i like the way you write, is this going to be a Novel or short story? either way it was good. your style is sort of poetic. Good work.

loved the writing. the descriptive dialogue was also great. there is one thing tho, i would suggest separating the dialogue from the text, it makes it easier to read. cant ...

thank you for your review, the tips are really helpful.

Wow. That's sounds exactly like my life. The watching from afar, thinking maybe i'm not meant to be happy or normal. I still have to act the part that my ...

im not real good at making titles. I dont really know if i can help you. but i do have an idea, how about Translucent. By the way i love ...