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Re: Bullets
My, my, my Butterfly it seems you've outdone yourself on this here short story. :) It was brilliantly written, however you do jump from tenses - past tense to present ...
Mar 17, 2012 -
Re: Children
I liked the simplicity of this poem and the structure was well done. I have seen this happen before, personally I think that even if ignorance and naitivity are still ...
Dec 28, 2011 -
Re: The boy you have to watch
Alright, this has potential but I do believe it needs to be fixed. "The boy you have to watch Who never shows his heart, Listens to beets, -- try ; ...
Aug 13, 2011 -
Re: thomas sabo
That's because it IS half of a conversation, the apparent other half was seemingly deleted -- or it vanished.
Aug 13, 2011 -
Re: I Jumped
As with the first reader and critique-er I will have to agree that the cliched romance theme does get a tad bit over-cooked. Though I like how you displayed the ...
Jun 25, 2011 -
Re: I Jumped
As with the first reader and critique-er I will have to agree that the cliched romance theme does get a tad bit over-cooked. Though I like how you displayed the ...
Jun 25, 2011 -
Re: I Jumped
As with the first reader and critique-er I will have to agree that the cliched romance theme does get a tad bit over-cooked. Though I like how you displayed the ...
Jun 25, 2011 -
Re: I Jumped
As with the first reader and critique-er I will have to agree that the cliched romance theme does get a tad bit over-cooked. Though I like how you displayed the ...
Jun 25, 2011 -
Re: I Jumped
As with the first reader and critique-er I will have to agree that the cliched romance theme does get a tad bit over-cooked. Though I like how you displayed the ...
Jun 25, 2011 -
Re: I Jumped
As with the first reader and critique-er I will have to agree that the cliched romance theme does get a tad bit over-cooked. Though I like how you displayed the ...
Jun 25, 2011 -
Re: I Jumped
As with the first reader and critique-er I will have to agree that the cliched romance theme does get a tad bit over-cooked. Though I like how you displayed the ...
Jun 25, 2011 -
Re: I Jumped
As with the first reader and critique-er I will have to agree that the cliched romance theme does get a tad bit over-cooked. Though I like how you displayed the ...
Jun 25, 2011 -
Re: I Jumped
As with the first reader and critique-er I will have to agree that the cliched romance theme does get a tad bit over-cooked. Though I like how you displayed the ...
Jun 25, 2011 -
Re: I Jumped
As with the first reader and critique-er I will have to agree that the cliched romance theme does get a tad bit over-cooked. Though I like how you displayed the ...
Jun 25, 2011 -
Re: I Jumped
As with the first reader and critique-er I will have to agree that the cliched romance theme does get a tad bit over-cooked. Though I like how you displayed the ...
Jun 25, 2011