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Swan Princess was actually my favorite movie when I was little. :D So yes, I remember the game - in the case of it being a game, making it a ...

Thanks for the comment. ^_^ Now I can start posting the rest of the chapter. (Chapter 7 continued) “Strick!” Markus’s frantic voice stabbed through Strick’s dream, and Strick awoke to ...

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Eeep! I wrote a review of this last night, but then my internet crashed. *stabs computer* Ah well, I'll try to rewrite it. Yay! I finally got to read something ...

I read the edited version of your prologue and it is much, much better. The only other suggestion I can give without being incredibly nitpicky is to clarify that Naera/Sarah ...

What has this world come to? :shock: *bashes head on desk repeatedly*

Thanks for the advice and encouragement, everyone. It is much appreciated. :D I posted a pronunciation guide here (you have to scroll down a bit, I think)

:) I don't feel the mood swing was overdone, but rather that it could have used a bit more description to make it a bit less abrupt. See ya around!

On to the second part! Torn away from the world of myths and legends, he nodded back at the statue of Leara the Forgiving she? Slowly, Aine made her way ...

I have a few concerns about my writing up to this chapter, so if anyone could help me with this, it would be much appreciated. :) 1. I feel like ...

Um... doesn't this belong in fiction?

I would be more than happy to give you some impressions! :D One more suggestion I had after rereading this: The part where Alex talks with the Grand Bithol was ...

Um... I think you pasted my earlier comments at the end of your story. :wink:

If the characters were identifiable, I feel it is only because they have been used so many times the readers can relate them to other, well-drawn characters. While the lack ...

Thanks so much, Dark Lordess! I toyed with that abrupt part a little - not sure if it made it any better, but I gave it a shot. Really appreciate ...