Published May 14, 2007
My life is very sad.
Because I got a bad critique from Brad (it rhymes even!)
And apparently my poem was very bad
because he told me to throw it away and not start over.
And I couldn't find a word to rhyme with over except for clover
So I wrote this emo poem about leaves.
And talked about how a spider weaves
in and out of its hole.
(that was a bad line. ><)
which is tasty like a sugar bowl
and the sugar bowl is sharp sometimes.
like this poem full of rhymes
and with those edges and rhymes.
And seaweed with brines
I cut myself up, into many lines.
Which has to do with geometry.
or if you think hard, menogemy (might be spelled wrong)
But anyway, Brad totally owned me
So I'm writing him a revenge poem to prove I don't suck as badly as he told me I did and that really I'm amazing because I said so.
Because I'm awesome.
And this poem is amazing.
and I think I'm the most bestest writer ever. END?
YES.
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Just amazing..... Loved it
[Clue 10/20]
the comment at the bottom of the first page
Some would say he's freaky.
Some would say he's huge.
Some would say he's really mean
'cause of his harsh reviews(?)
But most of all he's sneaky
'cause I'm here to spill some tea:
when Incandescence writes a post
he addresses it B(est) B(rad).
dis iz a gr8 poem omg u r so amzing!!!!1!!!!11!!!! emo poetry iz da best Brad izz rly dumb lol
omg ilu
aaah!You remind me of my brother ConorR, he's on this site too.
I think it is hillarious and don't worry, we all get a horrid review from Brad (shudders) sometime in our lives.
But he doesn't bite (much)
(sorry Brad!)
Charlotte
Ah, dear SPEW, who ever knew him well?
If energy and time kept up with impishness, I'd give it a brilliantly, er, impish critique. ^_~
... brings me back to the nostolgic days of Smaur's 'THE BESTEST STORY EVVAR!!!!!!' ^_~
What has this world come to?
*bashes head on desk repeatedly*
I loveth it.
"like this poem full of rhymes
and with those edges and rhymes." - ruined a most spectacular piece.
LOL
I love this! This is perfect!
Amazing, Amazing, Amazing.
...Has Brad read this yet???
Best writer ever?
Most certainly.
...I'm not sure whether I should laugh or cry. Probably both.
omgz Das ist so gud!
Keep it up!