Wolf

Whoa, whoa. Unfortunately, I'm not going to review this--too mature for me--but you should give it a rating! Ask one of the mods that are online (the ones in dark ...

Thanks Gwen! I must disagree with some of your nit-picks though. True, I could add more detail, and I am going to. But the 'though' does make sense when it ...

Aww, thanks you guys. :) After re-reading this, I agree with you on the Mother cat drama thing. :lol: I was pretty upset about her leaving though...but I'll work on ...

Thanks! :) And yeah, you did comment on my 'A Winter Midnight'. :P I'm working on getting rid of some of the description, but I can't add any dialogue. I ...

Thanks everyone! I'm going to tone down the purpleness a bit...and by the way, Maude is my dog. :D

Thanks Heather! You're right about the frostbite--it did happen to me though--because it's kind of just...a random statement. :P I'll change the sentences to 'struggle' and the tortoiseshell. Except,

:D Thanks everyone! I'm currently editing in on a separate document and hopefully I'll be finished soon...it's hard for me to get rid of some of the detail. I just ...

I promise you that I'll critique this tomorrow, but for now, you should fix the title. It should be: Sacuna's gift: Prologue.

Wow, this was really cool! I love wolves, and I can't wait to read more of this! It is kinda short though... Anyways, Keep writing, Ayra :)

Ok, I will! xD

Thanks! :) Yeah, I probably should have a new paragraph for different dialogue. I'll go fix that now! Cheers, Ayra :D

Oh, it was supposed to be short. In that case, Kudos! It was cool...and for some morbid reason, I enjoy reading about people being hanged. :twisted:

I could...good idea. :) Thanks, fellow Speaker of the forum! xD

And why is that? Is there something wrong with the critique and advice I posted? :?

:? I don't think you do to much 'telling'... Here's an example where you showed: The sand I see is bleached into a glow by the sun in the sky ...