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I don't like it. There isn't really anything poetic about this piece: interesting language? No. Could I relate to it? No. Proper grammar/punctuation? No. I know that not all poems ...

Prokar! Wow. This is really, really... excellent. I never knew that you were such an amazing writer! But now I do, and I am in awe -- how can you ...

Hey Saint! :D I thought I should get you back. [quote] Jaden’s heart beat [first time using the word 'beat'...] a wild tempo, every beat [second time...] so loud that ...

:oops: I'm so sorry that it's taken me so long to critique this! ... and you seem to have received some excellent crits already. >.< So there's no nit-picks, just ...

I'm going to have to agree with whoever said they'd like to say they enjoyed it but didn't, unfortunately. The first problem, I think, is that it's kind of cliche. ...

Hey ning! :D I'm here too late, as usual. But that won't deter me from trying to help you with characterization. I struggle with it too. It is incredibly difficult, ...

Hey! :D I did promise to review this, so I will. I'll do it paragraph-by-paragraph. PARAGRAPH #1: The sun dropped down, and the world was plunged in darkness. The New ...

Fangala! :D First of all, let me say that I love this. It's so... excellent. The rhyming scheme is AMAZING! They take you for status, I assume. Hierarchy dictates a ...

Ack! I am so late in reviewing this. :oops: I feel really bad, mainly because my critique probably won't be of much help, but I want to comment anyways. And ...

Hi Phebe. You asked me to review this, so here I am. He stood there, wind blowing faintly in his face, while he stood there admiring her perfect features: deep ...

Hey there! :D Birds flew out of the trees, disturbed by the world below. I don't like this as an opening sentence, to be honest. What exactly disturbed them in ...

Wow Keek, you get reviews fast! *jealous* Anyways, sorry I'm so late. >.< I meant to crit earlier, but I've been busy... well, as the other critiquers have covered, like, ...

Firstly, why bold it? But that aside, here's a critique for you: Deep breathe now. Huh? Did you mean: Deep breaths, now. My answer to you is no, and you ...

I don't owe you any more critiques, but I wanted to find out what happens to Emily. :) I have to say that I'm kind of disappointed. Her dad just ...

Hey Azila! :D Just so you know, I started this critique a while ago and so I might repeat some things -- my apologies if I do... Tiny snow flakes ...