Young Writers Society

“”The whole dropped into a fantasy death arena thing,” the girl said, rolling her eyes. She twirled around to face him. “I’ve seen people freak out over it before, vehemently ...

“Lucius, now sitting down, looked around the area him and Chris were in.” Area isn’t the best word. Try a more descriptive alternative like “space” or “blank space” or maybe ...

Okay, so for that paragraph where he wakes up, I think he would look at his sister first before thinking about how weird his dream was. Cause you have that ...

I’m in school so I have to read through this fast… so I’m just going to say what I’m thinking as I’m reading it should all be in order. Beginning ...

What are you doing here, so close to the forest?” he demands, pulling her away from the trees. “It’s dangerous. Don’t you listen to the stories? And the law of ...

Hello, Willow here. There really isn't that much to talk about improvement wise so I'm gonna just go section by section to say what bugged me First stanza, i woild ...

Hello, Willow here, aka the llama overlord. I will warn you right now that I'm an asexual writer, so I have no real interest or experience in romance for me, ...

Whoa! Just gonna drop me right in there! Okay! Well, I'm Willow, welcome to YWS. I would just like to point out the rating at the bottom of the setting ...

Hello, Willow here. Sorry if I'm bad at this I don't normally review stories, but today I', glad I did. First off my little nit pick. 2nd paragraph, womb is ...

Yello? This is Willow speaking, here to review. Pardon me if I'm a little rusty, I haven't reviewed in a while, but I'll give it a go. First off I ...

Hey, this is Willow (as evidenced by my name tag here), also known as the llama-overlord, but that's not as important right now. I haven't reviewed in a while so ...

Hello! I am Willow, Aka the llama-overlord, etc etc. it's been a while since I've reviewed anything so sorry if my advice is crudy. I'm a little rusty at this. ...

My suggestion, be more relaxed with your word choice. This is a very energized, emotional, tense piece. It has a good plot, but remember that this man is drunk. He ...

Hey....*stares down at her feet* Willow C. Here. I want to be serious, so no fun entrance like I usually do. I need to post a few of my pieces ...

Hiyah! Willow C. here bringing the jams! *pauses to listen* do you hear that? That is the sound of reviewing! Anyway, to the review. The first and most obvious issue ...