Wiggy

Golly geez, Matt-write more like this!!!!! I loved it from the first line, and the last line was absolutely bewitching! Awesomeness, girlie, awesomeness! :D Wiggy ;)

I don't know. LOTR storyline, hands down. Prolly LOTR. HP is all that jazz about witchery and wizardry-I think that LOTR is deeper, even if the books aren't as lively. ...

DD!!!!!! OMG, that was gorgeous. Simply gorgeous. I loved the imagery, and I have a soft spot for pieces that are about innocence and child-like stuff, because, well, that's kinda ...

Yiyiyi, Cal stole what I would have said!!!!! I do remember reading this a few days ago-and it totally reminded me of Pride and Prejudice. Isn't is funny how our ...

First of all, in the first couple of stanzas, I was thrown off by the first lines in each one. They were waaaaaay too long, and need to be separated ...

The line that Jig quoted also didn't make sense to me. Other than that, I really liked the poem. I could feel the emotion in it, and the last line ...

I liked it a lot! I would just change one thing in the second stanza: nothing there but pastel colours I'd put the "but" on the second line. I just ...

Easy to navigate, interesting, and pure awesome!!!! A++++++++! :D Wiggy ;)

Great job! Just a few punctuation things I'd change: Just breeding there, Dash after this will make it more powerful. A constantly painful passion, It isn't all you'd assume or ...

I liked it! The only part was at the end, when Karenna (says) Touche. I think it'd be better if you mentioned somehow she thought "Touche." It's just kind of ...

I liked it Liz!!!!! I really hope that your cough gets better...but cough drops are nasty!!!! And about no one reading poems-I do!!!!! I love your poems!!!!! Wiggy ;)

Also, one line break is a/iconic. I think it would properly be an/iconic. That's the only thing I noticed! Other than that, absolutely brilliant. You have such talent with weaving ...

OMG I love this story!!!!!! You're so talented at everything Jacko!!!!! Geez, from dramatic poetry to fanfic you've got it all! *applauds* Wiggy ;) P.S. Can't wait for more! :D

Loved it Jacko! I felt the excitement and tension throughout the whole narrative...brilliant job! :D Wiggy ;)

I agree with Snoink. The paper seemed to wander a bit and I think you need to center in on one point. Find an odd angle that would be enticing, ...