Whimsicalyx

I like the whole idea of the story. There was some missing punctuation, but it wasn't very noticeable other than the missing speech marks at the beginning. Just add a ...

I really like this, keep up the good work! I honestly don't think there are any improvements I can offer you. It's practically perfect! Not any grammatical errors I can ...

I must say, this was rather beautiful. The only fixes you really need to add is the lack of capital letters. Otherwise, you have perfect spelling and a great poem ...

I'm loving the start of this story! I'm just going to point out that there were only very (very) few errors, but otherwise, it was perfect! I couldn't tell if ...

This is a great start, and I'm looking forward to any new updates! ^_^ There are a few grammatical errors such as missing capital letters, and a little bit of ...