WallFlower

Thank you so much for your critique! I don't typically write horror, but I like to challenge myself, so this is what happened :) As to whether or not she ...

Glad you liked it! And thank you

Thanks!! And lol at the alliteration :)

Thanks!

Personally, I just say whatever action was next, like "He pulled the the car into the parking lot of the local carnival..." If I use transitional actions, I don't get ...

Thank you so much!

I noticed that there were several lonely lines, but I decided not to change them because I thought it would make her thoughts/actions seem more fragmented. But now that I'm ...

Darn! I missed it! :P

*facepalm* duh. Please excuse the total blonde moment (no offense to any blondes :) I know some genius ones)

Thanks!

Thank you!!

One of the best on this site? *faints* ... *wakes up and faints again* Wow! Thank you so much!!!

Haha I was expecting a monster under the bed or something. Man, that really just made me laugh! Great poem :)

I've never really seen anybody do that, but it sounds cool to me :) go for it!

Thanks for your critique! This is my first attempt at horror, so I was expecting some constructive criticism. Thank you for taking the time. I'll add those books you recommended ...