WaitingForLife

Heya, this is very nicely worded, and is an original idea. The flow is okay, but it sort of breaks up in my head at some points. I'll leave that ...

I agree with Dragonlady on this one. This is a good start, but you should go deeper. Give us more descriptions with which we can make the emotions really awaken ...

Heya skermitz! :) I personally can't distinguish a poem from a slab of butter, but I can tell when one sounds good. This one did. You didn't have that much ...

Heya, sorry that this took so long...but better late than never. ^^ You've built an interesting plot here. I'm guessing that Kat and gang are a special-ops hit team for ...

Hey ElementalBlood! ^^ I'll come back later to give you a full review (as I'm on a tight schedule), but I really liked the idea and the wording of this ...

So... How should I say it... This was bloody brilliant! I won't be giving you any real review, because quite frankly, I have nothing to critique aside from what Kafkaescence ...

Alrighty then, Life here to review! I really liked the plot you've got going on here, especially because you were basically keeping the reader in the dark, witholding vital information. ...

Hey, Life here to review! First off, welcome to YWS! :) I'm sure you'll enjoy it here. You certanily have a knack for writing, but that doesn't mean that there's ...

Life here again to review! :) So, this part of the chapter was more of character development than anything else. You showed us the main character's feelings and introduced us ...

Hey, I really like this! ^^ I loved your use of extreme contrast (black and white) and your wording had a good rythym to it. Nothing to critique really... But ...

Heya, Life here to review! :) My first impression: Oh, this is going to be another one of those-- wait a second... In other words, the first line didn't really ...

Hey, Life here to review! :) First things first... Welcome to YWS! I hope you'll like it here. ^^ On to ze review itself... I really liked the idea, and ...

Hey, Just stopping by to say that I really enjoyed your poem. The emotions felt real and raw, and your word choice and register seemed in place. Oh, and I ...

Heya, Life here to review! First of all, welcome to YWS! You've got potential and I'm sure you'll enjoy it here. ^^ On to the review: I found this piece ...

Hey, This is a nice little poem; it contains a lot of emotion, and seems, forgive my lack of professionalism in poetry, to be well written. But in my opinion, ...