WaitingForLife

Heya, first off, thanks a million for inspiring me to find help from the community for my poem for Valentine's Day. :) Now, I warn you, this'll be short, but ...

So, as Tanya said, Kafka covered the corrections. Just stopping by to let you know I'm still thoroughly enjoying this and I can't wait to read that last part. The ...

Heya, I actually noticed this was up two minutes after launch, lucky me. I'll throw in things that popped up while reading, not much crit though I'm afraid. ;) The ...

Heya, welcome to YWS! ^^ I liked this. Your poem had a very nice rythym to it, except in the very last line. It was too long compared to the ...

Heya! Nice job here. :) The flow is great, a consistent 7-6-8-6, which gives it a good structure, and the rhyme scheme worked. Your word choice was good and varied, ...

Hey, Life here to review! :) Wonderful idea! I loved the way you described the "wierd, wacky" world through channel surfing, as it is how we get almost all our ...

Heya Life here again, Another great chapter, Paul. ^^ The description of the memory was really well done; it seemed as if that could really be the case in the ...

Alllllrighty then, Life here to review. ^^ My first off impression was: wow, original names. Big bonus for that. Stories set in fantasy worlds with characters called Jim and Bob ...

This was a very interesting piece to read. I mean, I wasn't really sure what it was about till the end actually, but while I was scratching my head, I ...

Heya, This brought me a chuckle, which is always fun. The nit-picks have already been taken care of, so I won't bother saying them again. ^^ Nice, little work, with ...

Heya, I really, really liked this. The emotions were there clearly, without the need of extravagant descriptions; it was nice and raw. Your wording was good and the overall flow ...

Hey, Life here to review! :) You had a really good idea here, it's too bad that the presentation of it could have been better. Your wording was pretty good, ...

This piece had a very nice flow to it and I never expected the ending, which made it all the better once I reached it. This was a great idea, ...

When I read this I literally stopped breathing for a moment.:D The emotions in this piece are raw and powerful, subtley weaved among the words. It brought along a large ...

Heya, This was an interesting piece of poetry. Well written, no doubt, and had a lot of emotion in it. For the most part, it seemed bitter with a flavour ...