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Hi there! this is a cool story. Very cinderella-ish. As @anamel mentioned, the format is quite blocky, so I would suggest breaking it up a bit, especially with dialogue. Dialogue ...

Hi! Another great chapter! I loved how we could really see and feel Frieda's anguish and panic over losing her job. You can tell how much this means to her ...

I love this beginning! I like your world building, how colorful and vibrant her neighborhood seems. As a few previous reviews have mentioned, I'd have loved even more descriptions of ...

Another good chapter! This kind of wrapped up the whole "bomb section" of the story. Now I'm guessing we'll move on to something else. I'm curious as to whether we'll ...

Hi! Vita here with a review. This chapter is much better in terms of dragging. You've captured a bit more of the panic that comes with an intense situation. I ...

Sorry! Forgot to set this as a review at first, so I resubmitted it. Wow! This is really good! I was on the edge of my seat the whole time. ...

I love your concept, I just wish this was longer. I feel like there's so much more I want to know about the wolf, and the curse, and how the ...

Wow, this is really intense to read. I feel like I can feel the chieftains fear and pain. One of the hardest things to do in writing is to make ...

You asked me to tell you if the story is dragging, so I'll go ahead and say it, yes. But only a little bit. The problem, I think, is that ...

Let's start with the positives. First of all, I really liked the mysteriousness of this prologue, it feels very portentous. I'm curious to see what happens next. I like how ...

Really interesting second chapter, I liked how each girl clearly has a role in the group and they are all different. Val is angry and angsty, a classic rebellious teen. ...

This chapter is short but sweet! I really like the way each girl is described, they all feel like unique characters and I can't wait to get to know them ...