Vita

This is really good and I really really enjoyed it. I'm really glad that you portrayed a non-romantic friendship between a man and a woman, that's rare in writing and ...

Hi there! Another great and funny chapter. You definitely still have my attention. Their were a few things that could have been worded more clearly, and I've put my suggestions ...

Oooh, I like this! A well written adventure story with a strong female lead? Sign me up. I found some spots that could be worded more clearly and succinctly, but ...

Hi! Let me just say that I love this! Della is so funny and snarky, exactly the kind of character I love. This was super fun to read. For the ...

Hi! I saw this in the green room and went back to the first chapter to read the whole thing. I really like your concept. Like Plume said, it definitely ...

Hello! Vita here with a review, as requested. I saw a huge improvement in your writing this chapter. You fixed most, but not all, of the grammatical errors, making this ...

Hello there! You're somewhat new, so welcome to YWS! You definitely have a suspenseful and creepy story here! Those murders sounded pretty gruesome. To be honest, I would have liked ...

Hi! I'm Vita, and I'll be reviewing your prologue. Okay, so I can see a lot of potential in this. First of all, I like your premise. A teenager/young adult ...

Another good chapter! You moved the plot along quite a bit, but still kept the pacing consistent! good job! A few small nitpicks in terms of wording: "The Rosemallow sun ...

Hey there, Vita here for another review. We learn a bit more about your main character's personality in this chapter, and so far, I like what I see. Your main ...

Hi! first of all, let me just say, i LOVE your descriptions. I'm a total sucker for figurative language, and this chapter was great for that! They're unique and vivid, ...

Hello! I've read the other two chapters, and I must say, I'm impressed. You've built a world and characters that are very compelling. With so many dark themes in books ...

I like this! I like the idea of these two very different beings having this connection. They're both far from home, they're both prisoners, and they've both been manipulated fro ...

Another interesting chapter! I wonder what exactly caught Wenton's eye about that particular world. Once again, I love your imagery. Especially this part: "They would have been travelling through dark

Another interesting chapter! Florence is right, that Christopher guy is definitely perfect for Ms. Pringle. They're both equally horrible! One thing that I would elaborate more on is her relationship ...