Virgil

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This is Kaos here for a review! I tend to be iffy when people do Roman numerals in poetry, but I felt like this worked here and that it fit. ...

Thanks for the review! The lack of capitalization was intentional to set a more quiet tone to the poem, and then navel-gazing is a term that's used to describe when ...

Thanks so much for the review! It helped with your notes.

Thanks for the review!

I can understand that, yeah. The imagery does happen to hop around quite a bit which is my big flaw in poetry it seems, and I hate it. To me ...

Thank you! And yes, they're called stanzas, haha.

Thanks for the review! The alphabet soup and tomato sauce thing was mostly a usage of imagery with digesting all the words that "You" had said and that's the most ...

Sent that last one before you replied. It's quite alright! Sensory details do leaps and bounds in setting up the atmosphere. That's the description of the five senses and it ...

Forgot to leave this in the review: Your lines have a lot of weight and that was the strength of the poem, so try and focus on that.

For line delivery, I suggest using punctuation to your advantage and then tying a strong emotional connection to the line. Having weight behind your lines has to do with wording, ...

Dx I kept thinking of Fight Club too

OH MY GOD. I literally forgot that I reviewed this because my mind is shredded but I'm leaving this here as a comment because lol I can't believe that.

OH MY GOD. I literally forgot that I reviewed this because my mind is shredded but I'm leaving this here as a comment because lol I can't believe that.

OH MY GOD. I literally forgot that I reviewed this because my mind is shredded but I'm leaving this here as a comment because lol I can't believe that.

OH MY GOD. I literally forgot that I reviewed this because my mind is shredded but I'm leaving this here as a comment because lol I can't believe that.