Ventomology

Honestly, the closer I get to the end with this story, the worse the writing seems to get. I think the action/description disjoint might be getting better in the later ...

But if science is a butt, that means you can kick it. Anyways, thank you so much for being willing to put in the time to review this story! There ...

Oh my gosh! This is your first review? Welcome to YWS then! I look forward to seeing you around the site in the future. Thanks for the compliments. If you ...

I seem to be having a lot of difficulty with placing setting details. Ugh. Thanks!

Thank you!

Hmm... actually, the story is written in 3rd-person omniscient, and I just take occasional dives into the perspectives of the people on the bus, but since people have commented on ...

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Oh dear. I hate it when I have those little unintentional repetition bloops. Thanks for catching it! Also, 146 reviews? You're getting pretty close to another star. You go, Lizzy!

Ugh... yeah. This chapter seems to be part of a long string of chapters that have terrible setting description. You are absolutely correct. I could have included police lights and ...

After some research, I have found that hearken is actually the old form of hark, so you and I are both right! English can be a silly language. As for ...

I have fixed the repeat word. As for the detached narration, I do a lot of that on purpose, and largely for contrast. It makes the dramatic scenes a bit ...

Ah, well, Martin is a recently turned vampire, and a lot of vampire myths involve the church or cross being harmful for vampires. You might not have read that part. ...

Ack! A typo! Thanks for catching that. As for Drake and Willow... well, you'll just have to wait and see. :) Thanks again!

I guess, since I ride a very crowded bus at least four times a week, I tend to forget to mention how busy they are! Thanks for the reminder. I ...

While it is absolutely true that people with dark skin generally don't sunburn, it is important to remember that sunburns are not very different from burns from fires or the ...