Ventomology

Wow, I don't think I've ever gotten a comment about long sentences before. The change you're suggesting would alter the way this sentence is meant to be read, but I'll ...

Pssh. I've scrapped stories too. It's no biggie. Thanks for letting me know!

This entire chapter is kind of a mess, but it's nice to hear new comments! (And also get comments from someone who also knows the same lore.) Sorry I didn't ...

I have checked up on those little fixes. My own summer vacation starts tomorrow, so I should be catching up with your chapters soon. They're bookmarked and everything. Thanks for ...

Cameos would be pretty smart. I really should have thought of that. Also, I will try to describe more of the bus's interior. Hopefully that will flow better than describing ...

I will fix that typo as soon as I have computer access (and not just a teeny phone). As for the action... well. Thanks a bunch!

Thanks! You are correct about Martin and Drake, by the way. I look forward to hearing from you in the future!

Yeah... I've been wanting to rewrite this chapter since Thursday, but my family left for vacation that day. Sorry you had to read all those leaps of logic.

Yeah... I've been wanting to rewrite this chapter since Thursday, but my family left for vacation that day. Sorry you had to read all those leaps of logic.

How do I miss all these logic lapses? Thank you a thousand times for picking them out and continuing to review.

Yeah, this chapter may have some of the greatest (worst) leaps of logic I've ever written. I think I planned it without doing the proper research--first mistake right there--and then ...

It's not like, really late, but I feel like eight is too late to go out of the house.

Sometimes I read a piece of advice and I'm like: shouldn't I already know this? More than likely, I forgot to use words that are loaded with emotional connotation as ...

I've fixed the specific little things you pointed out. Thank you so much for continuing to review this piece!

At this point, I've really just accepted the fact that these later chapters are not as good as the earlier ones in terms of flow and comprehension, but I will ...