Ventomology

It's not like, really late, but I feel like eight is too late to go out of the house.

Sometimes I read a piece of advice and I'm like: shouldn't I already know this? More than likely, I forgot to use words that are loaded with emotional connotation as ...

I've fixed the specific little things you pointed out. Thank you so much for continuing to review this piece!

At this point, I've really just accepted the fact that these later chapters are not as good as the earlier ones in terms of flow and comprehension, but I will ...

Honestly, the closer I get to the end with this story, the worse the writing seems to get. I think the action/description disjoint might be getting better in the later ...

But if science is a butt, that means you can kick it. Anyways, thank you so much for being willing to put in the time to review this story! There ...

Oh my gosh! This is your first review? Welcome to YWS then! I look forward to seeing you around the site in the future. Thanks for the compliments. If you ...

I seem to be having a lot of difficulty with placing setting details. Ugh. Thanks!

Thank you!

Hmm... actually, the story is written in 3rd-person omniscient, and I just take occasional dives into the perspectives of the people on the bus, but since people have commented on ...

Thank you!

Oh dear. I hate it when I have those little unintentional repetition bloops. Thanks for catching it! Also, 146 reviews? You're getting pretty close to another star. You go, Lizzy!

Ugh... yeah. This chapter seems to be part of a long string of chapters that have terrible setting description. You are absolutely correct. I could have included police lights and ...

After some research, I have found that hearken is actually the old form of hark, so you and I are both right! English can be a silly language. As for ...

I have fixed the repeat word. As for the detached narration, I do a lot of that on purpose, and largely for contrast. It makes the dramatic scenes a bit ...