Ventomology

Eyoo back at it again. This is pretty short, and mostly just a continuation of the last Carris chapter I feel like, so I don't have a ton to say. ...

Okay so it was totally Sir Province. Also... carrier geese? Carrier geese??? This is so Canadian it's all I can think about. And don't think I didn't see the two-trees-one-spigot ...

Eyoo back again. I actually love the use of Sleepless as a term for the undead. It's a familiar word, so it's easy to say but is unsettling and also ...

Heya! Just cleaning out the green room, so I haven't read the previous parts. I swear I've been seeing chapters of this work for a few years now haha. Props ...

Heyaaaa. Back again. I know Devlin and Malcolm are on a time crunch... but if you reworked the timeline just enough, this could have been an awesome world-building chapter. I ...

OH. MY. GOD. How did I not know about this series? Whodunit fantasy is my absolute favorite I'm literally about to go back and read all the previous installments. We ...

Hey! Great work here. I do think if you didn't intend for these poems to be related, then you probably should have posted them separately--especially since they aren't in order ...

Alrighty, here we are again! I'm going to kind of follow-up to Junel's comment no. 6 here. Because pacing is really where this whole story I think needs to be ...

Lol these two really did get stuck with the most obnoxious spellings of two extremely normal names. I feel a little bad for them. This is a really lovely satirical ...

Heya! Went back and had a look-see at the prologue - excited to see how it relates to the rest of the story. Before I start, one word of advice: ...

Haha she's making progress! What a pleasant chapter. The dialogue between Alec and Carris strikes a really lovely place where they connect as people, and Carris learns something without being ...

Gosh, the writing just gets better and better. You've got some strong verbs, a good mixing of descriptive passages, action, and dialogue (plus some sentences that grab a teeny bit ...

Looool Alec serving up some sick burns. Does he have an accent? Occasionally you write him lines that have that sort of clipped English sound to them, like "same as ...

Ooooooh Devlin plans! Reviewing older chapters is so funny. Like I say something in a review and then find it as soon as I move on. It's like getting presents. ...

Eyyyyy. Going to kind of piggy back off of Spearmint here, because I was also actually a little surprised by her attitude when it started to become more pronounced in ...