Ventomology

Yeah, fight scenes! I love fight scenes. I promise you they are not filler, especially when they end in way epic plot twists like this one here at the end. ...

And look who definitely got around to reviewing this before the end of the week... Anyways, review time! General Comments Whoop. None. Something about this chapter feels sloppy, but since ...

Goodness, that was intense... I would hate to deal with anyone like Armand Assante. Anyways, onto the review: I don't often see main characters' weddings in the middle of a ...

Yoo, I finally made it! Anyways, I've revamped my review structure, so don't freak out or anything, okay? General Comments: English is a stupid language, so you are totally not ...

I finally made it, and Tort managed to post his chapter 11. I have my work cut out for me. Anyways, moving along: General Comments: Somehow, I feel like you ...

Ah, the chapter that I'm reviewing really late (but look, I'm still first). Going on: General Comments: Ooh, none of these. Hip, hip, hooray! Details: Oh, but I have a ...

I have made it! I know this is the later part, but I promise I read everything in the correct order, and this installment popped up on the home page. ...

Hey! I know I'm doing this a bit out of order, but I did read everything in order, so don't you worry. Anyways, I am officially restructuring my reviews, because ...

FINALLY. Ender, this is why we don't procrastinate. Anyways, onto the review! Note: Setting includes the "when." Throughout your piece, you've gotten better and better at conveying scenery and action.

Ah, and here we see Darren's genius again. Honestly, how has he always managed to be only an average student? Anyways, moving on. No notes this chapter. It'd be nice ...

Hoorah! I have finally made it. (But look, I'm still ahead of the other group members.) On with the review then! Note: You may want to tone down the cheese ...

Woo! Review time! Note: Throughout your uh, "infodump," you kept switching tenses. I know there are rules about places where that is acceptable, but the constant switching was a bit ...

Eugh... that was gory. I mean, it was really well-done, and I felt kind of sick after reading it, but like... blood. Note: This is mostly my personal opinion, so ...

YAY! I can finally catch up! Anyways, first, I have a small nitpick for you to consider. The mood between the two was now as strained as puree I know ...

Review time! Note 1: Leaps of Logic Some leaps are just a bit too far for the reader, and this chapter had a fine example. How Darren reached the conclusion ...