Vanadis

This doesn't really seem to jump out at me much. It's got potential, yes; however, it's about where lost dreams go, right? So they go to a place where they ...

Hello. This is a great poem. I don't think I'd change anything. A truth so vague, so fragile And yet it beckons That great black nothing From whence you were ...

Greetings! Some of these were pretty good. Haiku are in a way both the easiest and hardest to write; they've got three lines, so you don't have to have a ...

Greetings, Midnight person! I'm Vanadis, and I notice you're new-ish so I would like to welcome you to YWS. I'm sure you'll find your stay pleasant. So, on to the ...

Hello Angel! I want you to do something for me. Do it! Look at my signature; the one about the poetry. This poem is that one or two poems that ...

Greetings, Janay! I'm Vanadis, and I'll be giving my input; take it or leave it, but here's to hoping it helps some! I felt it best if I put my ...

Your poem has a good rhyme scheme and reads with a nice, easy flow. You did well with explaining things as they happened without going back or forward and then ...

Hello! Okay, so yes, when I asked if it was yummy, you should have said, "Affirmative." You said in chat that it would be a long review, and I agree. ...

Hello, your Magey-ness. So, as I've already told you, I'm not great at reviewing poetry (as much as I enjoy reading it,) but here are some things I think might ...

Hello! Nitpicks welcome? Okay. From what I saw, first you need to clean up the grammar, so I'm going to make suggestions on a paragraph-by-paragraph basis: We didn't want this ...

Hello! First of answer your questions. Jericho seems to be a good name for him so far. I think we'd have to see further what his aims are; we really ...

Hello you! I'm really liking this story so far. The moving away, being alone with no friends, hating life...that's something a lot of people can really relate to. However, some ...

]Wow. That was exquisite, and the feelings are definitely true. It's a somewhat common scenario, but portrayed in a way that makes it seem like she is very alone in ...

Hello again. Hope your new year's going worst, it should just feel like 2009, right? To the fixings! Two things were immediately clear to Stephanie. One: They were obviously lying. ...

Hello! I read part one, and the reviews seemed to get everything I would have mentioned; I didn't want to make a redundant review, so now I'll take care of ...