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Re: Can you hear me?
Hey RebelWriter! Great story but it just needs some more editing. In the first paragraph, "Him" should have been "him" (capitalization mistake). Also, it would have made more sense if ...
May 21, 2015 -
Re: Can you pack your whole life into a suitcase?
Wow! This poem was very thoughtful. At first I did not understand the title at all, which pulled me to your story. Now that I have read through it, I ...
Apr 4, 2015 -
Re: Cipa 1
Hi Satira! Great story, but I do agree with rachellecarter about the little background information as to why she is there in the first place. But there is also the ...
Mar 15, 2015 -
Re: Alone
Hello TheShauzer! As I read stanza one, I feel like you should have added a dash between "soul" and "somewhere". After moving on to stanza four, I got confused by ...
Feb 15, 2015 -
Re: My Tears Are Held
Hi there Inspiredravens! Your poem is beautifully written with only a few misleading parts in it. Here are the stanzas that stood out to me. Stanza 6 was mentioned in ...
Feb 8, 2015 -
Re: My Brother
Hi Chrissy! There were a few things that could have been improved on in your story. First of all, telling the reader that your main character is a girl sooner ...
Jan 31, 2015