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Re: The Kingdom That Never Was -Chapter One-
Thanks for the advice everyone. :-) I really appreciate this. Umm Im gonna make this first chapter longer some time tomorrow. Peace.. Y (supposed to be peace one understands that) ...
Tue Feb 05, 2008 4:17 am -
Re: Phoenix
Well done. Good plot. The only things missing are the descriptive words. It should also be a lil' bit longer, a prologue should be longer. I can tell that your ...
Mon Feb 04, 2008 9:15 pm -
Re: DoaV (1st version): Prologue
Hey SV... {This is good so far} [I've only read about half of it] -Im just commenting ahead of time- Uhhh I need points-so desperate-
Sun Feb 03, 2008 10:20 pm -
Re: My story: Prologue
If you are only 13 this is really good work for a 13 year old
Sun Feb 03, 2008 8:47 pm -
Re: Temperature Drop
Excellent work................well done.....Nothing really wrong
Sun Feb 03, 2008 8:44 pm -
Re: Just Another Life
wow this is unique
Sun Feb 03, 2008 8:39 pm -
Re: EverWayward #1
I really loved this...i will read your others as soon as I can. I dont see anything really seriously wrong with this chapter...well done
Sun Feb 03, 2008 8:38 pm -
Re: Magics : Prologue
I liked it you should fix it up and continue
Sun Feb 03, 2008 8:27 pm -
Re: The beginning of the story
Good but, it is kind of confusing though. Keep working on it. Well done
Sun Feb 03, 2008 8:21 pm -
Re: Back Porch Swing
Great rhythm but, this should be apoem instead of song lyrics
Sun Feb 03, 2008 8:18 pm -
Re: The Broken -- Chapter One
Really good. The only bad thing is that it took me 20 minutes to read this...break this up....good job anyways
Sat Feb 02, 2008 4:24 am -
Re: Temple Of Renaissance-Prologue
i will take these into consideration
Sat Feb 02, 2008 4:08 am