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So far I like Asha. She seems strong, determined, and willing to overcome her obvious discomfort at her surroundings to reach her goal. You did a great job early on ...

My turn. Note that I am a critical reader, and a bit of a cynic. So Don't take anything that I say to be too damning or anything, it's just ...

(sorry for reposting this. I forgot to click the review button and can't edit the original) This is good, and well written, though I have a few nit-picky things here ...

This reminds me of that chubby little kid on youtube singing the cuppycake song. I would obligatorily post the lyrics for it here, but I don't think that's suitable to ...

Hi. I'm a bit new to the site and I can't claim to be a professional writer, so I do these reviews in order to (mostly) raise my own point ...

Just to get nitpicky stuff out of the way ''Oh, look at you!'' I heard a loud voice exclaim from above me. If the story is written in first person, ...

Overall it's a nice piece. Your inclusion of the dinosaur backpack is a nice indicator of his age. He clearly gets picked on and is a mama's boy, so to ...