Tyler17B

Dang. Let me say, this is fantastic. Just, wow. I don't know the background story to this, but this is just wonderful. You really captured the raw emotion from seeing ...

This is actually really good. Before we can really help you though, you'll need something critical: length. There were a few things you could improve on, though: 1) Avoid the ...

This sounds amazing! It's definitely something I would read. Do you plan on a sequel to this? Of course, you'll have to write this first, but let me say, well ...

This is great! It was more or less difficult to read, but it was refreshing. It's a brand new setup that usually isn't used, and I'm thoroughly impressed with your ...

I really like the idea of this, but it can definitely be improved. The first sentence in itself has a problem. Try to keep the tenses the same throughout your ...