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Hi psudiname! Sorry this has taken a little while to get to. Luko's heart raced at the sheer stupidity of his actions. Cursed with an irrepressible love of forbidden actions ...

Hi Horus! This was interesting, but I'm not entirely sure what to make of it. Who or what is the Turtle? What's so special about a hug? Lost it sits ...

Hi again! “Peter . ” S he says finally. Should be a comma and small letter. “It seems you’re human after all, Peter Pan . ” S he says. Should ...

Hi again! The world she returns to is the not same one she left. Typo. But in the land of Never, Never-ending, and Always, Always-waiting, the days run into weeks ...

Hi Aurrora! Sorry this is so late. >_< She ran – no, flew, on wings made of shimmering dust and dreams – away with him. Love the description, but the ...

Hi Audy! I'm sorry this has taken me a long time to get to, and sorry again because I don't have a lot to say. To me, this seems to ...

Hi PixieStix! I liked this and I didn't. What you have here is a common theme executed well. There's plenty of emotion here, but it would benefit from a bit ...

Hi Hero! Okay, so I'm still very much a poetry novice, so this review won't be as thorough as it should probably be, but I'll give you my general impressions. ...

Hi Valentine! And on your deathbed, when you’re old and grey, when you’re kids have kids, and their kids are starting to have kids. You’ll know, that when you’re eyes ...

Hi Vyper! :D Father was gripping the arms of his chair so tightly his knuckles were turning white ; I couldn’t tell if he was more scared or angry with ...

Hi Vyper! My name lives with her parents and younger brother on a small farm in the county I live in that has been in her family for eight generations ...

Hi Dude! Juliana sat under the tree without saying a word as she tried to empathize with how Lucian must have felt. This sentence feels a little cluttered, so you ...

Hi Dude! “Baldren and I went out into the woods whenever business was slow. We made a couple wooden spears and trained with them just like we did Orika…” ----------------------------------------

Hi Lothbrok! Whisky by the smell, I think, hardly surprising given the owner's line of business. “Think” is present tense, when the rest is in past. It bumped every few ...

Hi Dude! Her mind dwelt on Lucian for the second straight night. I thought this meant that two nights had passed since the talk by the fire and end of ...