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Keep it the way it is and don't even consider "lesbian action". You'll spoil a good piece of writing. Your characters could be rounded a bit more, but if you're ...

Ah, poor Lataar. And now what's gonna happen, I wonder? Trying to find things to pick out... For perhaps the hundredth time he went through the events on the planet ...

I had a real nice review writ, and then I lost it. *head/desk* However... Great bombshell (again)... great chapter (again)... very enjoyable (again).... not much to nitpick (AGAIN?) Lol, there ...

It's dangling, dangling! What's dangling? The ending! So far, this looks good, and what little there is flows well. One sunny afternoon in a forest abundant with animals , a ...

I like, but I don't think every line needs to start with a capital. And this is probally me being uber thick, but I don't get these paragraphs: They needed ...

Everyone else picked out the very few errors. This was very enjoyable and very well written, but the behaviour of the baby isn't very realistic. She's a few weeks old, ...

Rofl, those fairies' gifts! Yeah, do carry on, and PM me when you put the next part up, will you? As Syddles before me, I have only one thing to ...

:smt119 So, it was a.... dream? It happened in Lucas' dream, but when he got stabbed it happened in the dream and it happened in real life where Lucas was ...

VERY interesting! Reminds me slightly of "The Planet of the Apes". I didn't see many errors, but you need to space this out better. You've divided this up into three ...

I don't think it was confusing; I got it. Tangles, tangles.... Brad and Kiera, Cat and the abducted Annie. :smt037 I saw only this: His excellent vision enabled him to ...

Great! Flog me for not reading this before as I said I would. :smt079 All the teeny-weeny errors I saw have already been pointed out, so there isn't anything else ...

Never read any of Agatha Christie. Are they good? I prefer Doyle. Isn't Miss Marple some crazed old bat who has to be called in everytime the police can't solve ...

Clau got some good stuff here. The ending felt too rushed. For the first part, they're crouching, waiting, talking, and you're describing stuff in a leisurely fashion. Fine. But suddenly ...

Interesting. If you're dealing with unicorns, though, you always have to be careful not to copy Peter Beagle. This was grammatically sound, and I didn't see any errors, so mae ...

Yeah, take out the rhyming, or make it better. I drool over good rhymes, but this was too forced in some parts. Like here: I’ve been in more danger than ...