Twinkle4ever

First of all I would like to say that your poem was short, sweet, and enjoyable. I would suggest that you try using stronger words to grasp the readers attention. ...

Hi! I'm amazed you call this worst of all your poems. It's definitely short but all in all it's sweet. Even when you think it's bad, there are still going ...

Oh my God! That poor girl. I feel sorry for her. Your writing had that effect on me. You seem to amaze me every time. Do carry on with this ...

Hey! I'm not confused here at all. I get the idea why you didn't describe the character. This piece you've written was full of deep emotions. I couldn't stop feeling ...

I like your thinking. You've chosen a good and suitable title for your poem. I have to agree with PurpleEurope. It is a bit long but not at all boring. ...

I know you must've posted this a long time ago but I just wanted to review one of your work. So here I am. I see you've done a pretty ...

Hey! You've started off your poem quite smoothly. A question is always a good way to start. At first I thought it would be all about the rain and its ...

Hi! I read your story and I don't think it was boring at all. It reflects true friendship :). That's what I love most about it. Whatever you wrote, almost ...

I kind of like the title. 'Death' it's eye-catching but you could add another word or maybe an adjective to it. I think the poem is a translation of the ...

Hi again. Wow! You really have a poet in you. The poem is amazing! There is a fair amount of description and it's definitely different from the one's I've read. ...

It was a very sweet poem. 'Baby steps' makes me think of my little sister. Anyway, the emotions you've described in this poem are very clear. They can be interpretted ...

Okay. First of all, welcome to YWS. Second, I like the theme of this poem. The first paragraph caught my attention. Test tubes clattering, clashing Tumbling, spitting, spurting You've described ...

Wow. I'm glad it came to a good end. It's amazing how your writing is able to catch my attention everytime. I loved the descriptions in it and each and ...

Woah! Your work reflects strong emotions. I like the part where you describe about the lies the girl tells herself just to make her feel better. You've described all the ...

Okay, so I read your poem. I can say that it's very dramatic (Compliment). I couldn't find any faults except, 'Your with me' should be 'You're with me' 'Your behind ...