Trident

Luna, I found this well done. Extremely original. I recently read a science fiction story that was so different from anything else, it was so fresh. And then you come ...

Hey aero, I hope this helps. :D Mud flew everywhere as he dove into the black pit of goo behind the famed apple tree that made up his imaginary war ...

Thanks for spacing that. ;) You started off well. The description wasn't superfluous. However... One person in particular, walking at a fast pace, was heading towards the main square. I'm ...

All right, I've given this piece a good look. It was a bit annoying to keep reading the same part over again, but I got over it. ;) Everyone else ...

Welcome to YWS blackwings! Before I start, I just want to mention that you might want to get in some critiques of other works before you post anything else. You ...

Er... sorry to inform you of this, but this a writing site. If you expect us to take the time to look at your work, then you better well have ...

Welcome to YWS. I see this is your first story posted. Okay, to start off, military writing, whether it be in the past, present, or future, is always fun to ...

The beginning's a bit slow-- I assume that's intentional as to not give away the profession too early. It was even more trouble when your PA was on some sort ...

All right, I read this a while back, and I guess I'll comment on it now. It will certainly help in my crit count. :D I didn't like it. The ...

This kind of story is always fun to read. I love when small historical quirks find their way in, and when you write a real person such as Khrushchev, it's ...

Myth, I caught everything right away. I understood what roles the characters took. Certainly, I could understand if one had missed an important phrase and got caught up and weirded ...

It was a bit hard to get into. The structure was a bit weak and the first paragraph turned me off. I felt like I was reading an angsty story, ...

This was nice. I like how it didn't give too much away to the reader. One thing, if he says this: “I give some people power, but I didn’t give ...

All right lizard, here we go. :D I feel this needs something more than what you have. I can see you have a nice plot ready and a good story ...

To start off, this is a very plausible situation. It could easily happen in the real world. In fact, this very type of conversation probably happens hundreds of times each ...