Trident

Meh, I thought it was okay. The beginning was rather tell-ish. And kind of boring. Ven was difficult to get a feeling about. He just seemed sort of there. He ...

The beginning was slow. And somewhat hard to get through. But it seemed you warmed up after a while and once they got to the lake, it was exciting. The ...

Hm. Interesting. The descriptions were very nice. They felt unforced and although some were long, they were all relevant and kept the scene going. I loved the use of Buddha ...

What I take it to be is the fact that there is all this great amount of space that separates us from anything else out there; space incomprehensible to the ...

I wouldn't keep going back and forth between the poem's narrator and the bird. I would focus on the bird and then try to give it anthropomorphic characteristics. Some of ...

Yes, this poem does seem like it would be much better read out loud. It does remind me of the coffee shop-type, jazzy rhyme sort that I might enjoy hearing. ...

You're only eleven, so I didn't think it was that bad. The last poem I read was also about school. Perhaps you could expand into topics other than that? I ...

Incan, This is good, but I fear that Jonathan's continued dip into despair is causing this story to drag. I have told you my opinion about the story's beginning and ...

I liked it for what it was, just a beginning I assume. My shoes led me down the street, slapping a flat-soled rhythm on the damp pavement. It sounds good, ...

It's interesting, but there are some fallacies of reasoning in here. If I have no reason for existing then I would not exist Why must there be a reason to ...

Okay, this may just be because I am reading this from a guy's perspective, but it was very difficult to get through. The writing is good, there are really no ...

Stories about the Holocaust are almost impossible to write. Why? Because we can only imagine the terror that these people went through. And that's what it was, terror. The victims ...

Yes, I agree, it's a nice little story, especially for children. I guessed the ending about a paragraph from the end, but I'm not seven, so it's not a huge ...

I too had to read this several times to truly take it all in. (But I seem to do that with every poem, so that really doesn't mean anything. :)) ...

I liked this gyr. It was well written, surely, and the plot develops nicely with all the nice small mysteries that you will solve for us later. That keeps me ...