Torpid

Ok, it's all rewrotten so none of the above posts apply, please gimme ure thoughts.

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i dont think ill continue it, it was really just a thought that came into my head. im actually quiting a lot of my stories right now anyways. (i hardly ...

there is always a lot of violence in these stories, im gunna have to start putting in some storyline, oh well, the plot shall come next!

a decade isnt that long in their life but it's a long time to be missing in a dangerous world I know i'm not one to talk, hardly ever having ...

was he a terrorist? 'they were the invaders, it was his country to defend'. You referred to the guys as soldiers, u.s. guys? Is this from the bad guys point ...

they've been looking for the waywatcher for a decade or did they just now decide after ten years its time to go look? Other than thta it was short but ...

hey!! Where's the rest? its like 12 at night and i got nuthin to read!wats ure excuse, huh!??jj but seriously, write some more already, ~Torpid

Yes, Salvatore is flippin gifted. Where's Yurok? And i think i forgot to say this before but when i read yurok it didn't seem so elvenly a name but its ...

yes, i kinda picture Ricirik as having a van helsing type look and between that and the Leadslinger concept if this book ever got published a lot of people would ...

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Readers, you should know that this was somewhat rushed and i made it quick. I will most likely come back and rewrite it but i really wanted to see what ...

ok there it is, totally different than what it was

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Thanks, the next is coming soon. I guess i'll have to start writing this more since Atlantean isnt getting any replies. blast... ~Torpid