Torpid

It was late when i wrote it so crit lots, i think it could be better but im tired so, its your turn now The three men swapped looks at ...

I didn't get to read it all cuz im at skool but it looked...GOOD! i'll come back and read it thoroughly next time though. ~Torpid

Prolly wont write more cuz i was just 'doodling' when i wrote this one but thanx for the comments and replies ~Torpid

Thanx ill post the next when i can and i already have lots of plans for this story so, yeah, talk to you all later ~Torpid

Thanx all, im at skool, ill post the next when i can ~Torpid Ive made plans for this story, when i get time the next will come. Thanx for being ...

Thanx everybody, i'm at skool so itas not like i can post a new story/part, sry. Thanx again ~Torpid

Think about adding hints at details such as: Why did the Leadslinger attack Ricirvik? Ricirvik IS the Leadslinger, silly goose, or did i make somehting confusing?

Well i dont keep track of their life either i just rememberered that from one time, gaw.

Thanks, i actually hadn't really thought about making any innocent/heroic Murchalls but thats a good idea. I take your advice. ~Torpid

I thought at first that it was a demon type thang. Either world has a lot of potential but i'd say i'm leaning towards the now world with monsters.

You compiled it all...theres a lot there. Its like a book. I need a cyber bookmark.

Thanks a bunch!, i think i'll write about a Murchall who will become the Atlantean groups nemesis and in the process i'll be describing their wicked world. Also, the 2nd ...

Thank you, i look forward to reading yours ~Torpid

Rent the movie ALIENS OF THE DEEP, its about the mid atlantic ridge and the ocean floor. It's like a different world down there, hydro thermal vents, mini volcanoes release ...

thanx, i think i might reread the Atlantean stuff and try to write a third part.