ToritheMonster

Aha DaOD has so many issues. It does get a little less juvenile and confusing, but I need to pretty much completely rewrite the beginning. I agree, it is sort ...

Another note! Don't do a spelling/grammar-type review of the DaOD parts unless you really want to, because I know they're a mess. The mistakes in there are super obvious, so ...

*have to do it. Bwah. I type too quickly. Also, *does more. Although smores are yummy.

Haha, everyone's been telling me to just do paragraphs. I guess I have it. It doesn't add very much. I actually didn't realise I was using colons for his dialogue ...

Awesome! That is some solid advice. I do believe that I describe a later character as having those "icy blue eyes" later. So that will be changed. You're totally right. ...

You're right, I just sort of started banging it out at two in the morning and I was like "HAIR! Everyone should know about hair colour! And descriptions! All of ...

What?! What?! I thought it was just a weird prison story or something. *reads immediately*

Aha thanks, I'll definitely go back and do some serious editing here. And speak of the devil, my dad just told me to read Slaughterhouse Five, but I haven't yet. ...

Thank you so much! I'm glad you liked it. I agree, the dialogue needs a lot of work. For the insanity stuff, I'm trying to convey thought specific to beig ...

Thank you so much! I'm glad you liked it. I agree, the dialogue needs a lot of work. For the insanity stuff, I'm trying to convey thought specific to beig ...

Meh. I wrote a nice long thank you and it got deleted. Now I'm sad. But, anyway, thanks! This was super helpful. The story is going to be three plots ...

No problem. Glad I could help.

Gracias!

Heh, this actually was a ranting blog post, Twit. Well, Facebook document to be exact.Just meant to be humorous, not really a review. I just thought some of the literary- ...

@justagirl Yup, it's very iconic classic American literature. Sorry if this was kind of a spoiler! But yeah, if you read the book, it's very interesting when you actually take ...