ToritheMonster

Come on..... somebody review???????????????? Please?????????????????????????

Thanks everyone! I made a lot of changes, and I hope it's better now. :mrgreen:

Yep, it was my kitty (don't worry). Thanks!

hmm...I don't really see the point of this poem. What are you trying to get across? Your imagery is very good, though.

Hmm... this is okay...The plot's pretty weak, and it's slightly confusing.

slow sad and sweet. i dunno why, but it reminds me of Ray Bradbury. keep writing!

no offense, but it sounds like you just wanted an excuse to write a murder story. A murder has to have some depth-- this didn't. entwine some more facts and ...

woah... creepy. Needs some work, but overall entertaining.

hmmmm... it's alright, but the very first sentence is very Twilight-like.