ToritheMonster

Thank you very much! I think your understanding was pretty spot-on. A comma between "addictions" and "routine" would not be grammatically correct, but thank you for your suggestions and the ...

Well thank you! Honestly, I haven't the slightest how American dialects work, I had no idea I was actually imitating some sort of West Virginian dialect. It was just sort ...

Thanks! I only wish you had pointed out specific lines, I hate thinking I've been too cheesy. I agree, I tend to get too comfortable or have trouble falling into ...

Thanks! I don't know about changing the spacing much because it's fairly intentional, but I'll take it into consideration.

Thank you very much! Yknow, I've heard that quote somewhere and I must have subconsciously been thinking about it when I wrote that. Huh.

These sound like song lyrics. Prettttttty cool yo.

Thanks! Actually, the first "she" is referring to the handmaid, but I agree that that's very unclear. I'll go back and fix it up.

Thank you very much! Yeah, it's really more supposed to be prose than a short story and all my punctuation was fairly intentional. I just didn't want to post it ...

Thanks, I suppose.

It's really supposed to be prose, so yeah, lyrical and stuff. It's supposed to be a little unclear, and the timeline is sort of set up as an event taking ...

Thank you very much!

I hate to be a downer, but the Hitler line is just entirely... historically inaccurate. He was a great (great as in successful, not good) soldier in WWI, and then ...

Please credit Dr. Horrible's Sing Along Blog, or else this is plagiarism.

1. Format like a song with spacing, indicate chorus/stanzas, etc. 2. Get rid of 90% of your exclamation marks. 3. Will review.

Thanks!