ToritheMonster

Oh man, this is so much better. I can freely admit now that I didn't even read the first one entirely, it was that bad. But this one, I'll be ...

Heya! Here as requested! So, I quite enjoyed this. Your imagery was very cool, and it all flowed quite smoothly. As the others have said, my one problem was the ...

Hi, Stela! Okay, I'm not going to nitpick this, both because other people have, and because there are really too many mistakes to fix. When you write, be sure to ...

Hello, Seemingly! Okay, this is gonna be an uber-long review, but I don't mind. This was really good. First, I'll give you my nitpicks and comments in red . If ...

This was very cool! Here's my edits, in red: Killing the sun and stopping the glow, The moon plots her jealous revenge. Venus and mars cannot intervene, Both busy battling ...

Heya Skinsy! So, I really loved this chapter. Perhaps that's because I love clothes, and there were a lot of clothes in it. But I thought it was very interesting. ...

Heya Skinsy! Here to review again. Alright, did I miss a chapter here? I don't remember ever meeting anyone named Ella. The last thing I remember is Oliver passing out. ...

Heya. Here as requested. So, I don't really have any nitpicks that haven't been caught, so I'll give you my general impression and some stuff you might want to work ...

Hiya! Dreamy here as requested. So, I'd say all my little nitpicks have been covered by others, so I won't repeat them. Here's my general impression (hehe. I love the ...

Hiya Skins. So, I quite enjoyed this. I don't really have many nitpicks, so I'll just give you my overall review. I think this is turning into an interesting story. ...

Heya flower, here as requested. I think everyone else has covered my nitpicks, so I'll just give you my overall feelings. So, this poem had a depressing feel to it. ...

Heya doll. I have a lot of nitpicks for this one. Here it goes, in red. Chapter 1 High school sucks. If anyone tries to tell you different, it’s a ...

I agree with what Fire said. This poem isn't up to your usual (very, very high) standards. It's not bad, but not quite up to what we're used to from ...

Heya! So,I thought this was an interesting poem. The words all flowed together beautifully, and you used some great language. Overall, I'm afraid to say that I didn't really understand ...

Oh, wow! You totally had me convinced that it was a wedding untill the end. Kinda depressing. Very clever and original idea. I didn't really have any problems with it, ...