Timasaurus007

At points it is somewhat confusing in its expression, such as the end of line 2, and the start of line 3, perhaps insert a comma or full stop to ...

I think it's a good attempt, with a unique style, though I cannot tell which elements are stylistic choices that are attached to the themes of the poem, if something ...

I rather like it. It offers many perspectives and interpretations, and the language is appropriate and sophisticated at some parts, though also simple enough for it to seem quite casual, ...

Hm, I rather like the premise and idea of the poem, full of optimistic grandeur of a romantic lover. I also like the fact that you capitalised the ends of ...