Tigersprite

Shaddowsoldier, I still don't think you're listening. Before you follow this up (which I advise you not to) you need to show us a revised version so that we know ...

Thanks for all the fantastic comments guys. I'll go over it and make some corrections, but I just need to finish writing a competition entry. Thanks! :) TIGERSPRITE P.S. If ...

PS: Don't worry about TigerSprite's harsh critizism, I'm sure he was having a bad day. Trust me, I wasn't having a bad day. Shaddowsoldier needs to revise this completely. It's ...

Where's it gone! NOOOOOOOO....

Thanks for the comments guys! I edited it a bit to try and make the demigod/ elf distinction clearer.

It's a tie between The Famished Road by Ben Okri, and Annie On My Mind by Nancy Garden.

Eragon (and two following books). Sweet. And a more recently read book about a lawyer being accused of murduring his former lover, which he didn't do. Innocent Unit Guilty, or ...

Thanks for all the comments guys, this was the second poem I ever wrote after Don't Cry Child (which based on comments, isn't quite as good as this one). Thanks, ...

Beautiful poem, only problem was that you didn't need to leave the space between go and to in the third line of the second stanza. Nice job! =) TIGERSPRITE

My nitpicks are pretty much the same as wickedwonder's. Aside from that, it was a pretty good poem. TIGERSPRITE

There isn't much to correct other than everything mentioned above, good job. The poem was interesting and creative. TIGERSPRITE

Creepy. The descriptions are done well, especially how Tim talks of how he likes to walk around at night. But I don't understand why Tim stopped thinking of Lockhart as ...

Nice, simple poem. My only slight problem was the lack of capital letters at the start of the sentence, and I think heaven and hell should also have started in ...

I like this. It's the same vibe as that Sober song by Pink.

I agree with Persephoneia; great imagery. Wondered why it was sixteen, and I still wonder, for the way you present the poem is not explicit at all, it's beautiful. Great ...